Narrative Essays Subject ____ The topic is too broad ("my childhood," "our championship season"). ____ The event doesn't seem important to the writer. ____ The essay either trivializes a major event or overstates a minor one (this second case can be effective if handled humorously).
Narrative Structure of the Event ____ The event sprawls over too much time or space. ____ The event is not clearly framed for the reader; it should begin or end at another point. ____ The narrative drags in places, or skips over important episodes too quickly. ____ The narrative lacks dramatic tension or suspense. ____ The dialogue is not dramatic and uninteresting; it does not move the action forward.
Anecdotes and Scenes ____ Are either too brief or much too extended. ____ Do not seem to relate well to the event, are poorly chosen or badly framed. ____ The essay lacks telling details to build a dominant impression. ____ The writer has not selected relevant details, or includes too many trivial, irrelevant ones. ____ People do not seem believable in their actions or dialogue.
Significance to the Writer ____ There is no apparent significance. ____ The significance is heavy-handed, inflated, oversimplified, or sentimentalized; the writer moralizes about the event. ____ The significance is trite and overly generalized ("I learned what friendship is all about"; "I learned not to trust anybody"). ____ The essay is not very thoughtful in exploring the event's significance; the writer may come off as a hero or a blameless victim. ____ The essay has not given the reader a vivid impression of the narrator. |
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